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Posted: 20 Oct 12 10:56

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NEVADA STATE PENETENTARY (ABSNN) - O. J. Simpson is offering to sell the knife that was used to slay his wife, Nicole, and her friend Ron Goldman, for the sum of $5 million. Guards at NSP immediately tossed his cell but found nothing other than a batch of "Green Goddamn," a prison-made alcoholic punch, and two O.J. NFL Rookie Cards. Simpson was then transferred to the prison infirmary where a fu.....

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Posted: 20 Oct 12 11:02
This story was written quickly and I had to get it onto FB to ompete with another site that was getting ready to post.

Realizing that I could come back and edit on the site, I went with this. How can it be made better! Sparing my feelings wom't make me a better writer. However, hold your "don't like it" stuff unless you have a line that makes it better,

We will read the ideas, and reaprov it and go from there.

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Posted: 20 Oct 12 13:16
Frankie

Skip the "this" from the end of the first para, so that it reads "at the time of writing."

Other than that it reads well. And for once I get this, because I'm familiar with the characters and situations involved.

There's room for a couple of jokes in there too, like about 'the glove' and the low speed getaway car, and possibly where the authorities had been concentrating their efforts in the search for Hoffa's body. Or maybe that would be too much and bloat the whole thing.

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Posted: 21 Oct 12 19:37
I'll make the corrections and resubmit it. Thanks buddy!

Do you remember the last time I wrote about dicovering Hoffa's body? It was found in Nancy Pelosi's vagina, along with neanderthal cave paintings and stuff--2009-10 I think?

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